Review: Echoes of the Rainbow

June 13th, 2010

Echoes of the Rainbow is a well-done romance I feel.

I saw the middle of it, standing in HMV just now, so I cannot comment on the start or the end.

Warning: no effort to mask the plot in what follows.

I started watching it in a section where the protagonist, a guy of perhaps 18 years old, is walking through a graveyard with a girl of about the same age. They clearly like each other, but haven’t actually kissed or anything yet. I felt the scene was very romantic and touching. Something about how the girl looked perhaps?

I would like to be able to write romantic scenes like this.

I felt some of the bits of conversation, whilst not complicated particularly, were quite pleasing to me.

They talked about a rainbow, and then a double rainbow, and how they are rare, and they are clearly talking about themselves, and they each know it, and I felt it was quite beautiful.

Later on, it seems that the girl’s family is really rich, and we know the guy’s family is not, so it seems obvious that they cannot be together. I was unsure how this would be resolved.

Later on, the boy becomes ill from leukemia, and the girl moves to America.

I didn’t watch to the end – I was standing in the middle of HMV after all :-D – but my guess on the resolution is that the girl comes back, they’re together whilst he dies, and then it doesn’t matter that they can’t be together, since he is dead.

If that is the resolution, it is a little disappointing to me to be honest, though it might not be what actually happens. I am just guessing, and maybe my guess is rubbish!

The film highlighted to me the disparity between rich and poor in Hong Kong, which I think holds true today to be honest. There is a scene in a hospital where they have to pay money to the nurse to give an injection. And also, it seems that shop owners had to pay money to the police for protection. I heard that this is still true today, though actually I heard that the protection money is paid to gangs, which is barely better I feel…

Hong Kong is I feel a hard place for many people who are local Hong Kongese. I feel a little guilty to live a comfortable life here.

Avatar

April 4th, 2010

I wrote this on 31st January, but I didn’t get around to publishing it out, for various reasons:

[Edit: there's a lot of waffle here. I think you might just want to jump to the conclusions at the end ;-) ]

Well, I finally saw Avatar, yesterday night. My girlfriend paid for me :-P She said that if I walked out early I’d have to pay the price of the ticket back, but that turned out not to be a problem…

Avatar was a fairly standard story, but I never found myself bored. I think the romance aspect was really well done, I really liked the female Navi, and I thought the hero was pretty cool, in a somewhat-cavalier but not overly-so sort of way, I felt.

I think I was fairly curious to see what the solution to the problem would be. After all, it’s a common problem that many groups of people are confronted with on a number of occasions throughout history, and I guess if I thought about it, maybe in everyday life.

At the time when the solution became military, I was somewhat skeptical, and after having put a few minutes thought into it I still am.

But first, a comment on slashdot was ‘The navi would be less lovable if they strapped suicide belts on themselves’. I’m not sure if that’s really the case. The French resistance didn’t use suicide bombers but I’m not sure how a suicidal act of the French resistance would garner less sympathy from the other French people, under the German control, than a non-suicidal act would. Now, one could argue that remote bombs against civilians would not garner sympathy, and I think that point is pretty solid on balance, but I’m less certain about French resistance people carrying out suicidal acts against military checkpoints, barracks and such.

That said, I think a key-point is that the Navi acted as a group, a community, one country against another, not as something that could be perceived to be, or really was, a few isolated individuals acting on some mentally-unstable whim.

Perceptions in wars, especially nowadays, are I feel important, are a key part of winning one.

In Yugoslavia’s fragmentation wars a decade or two ago, one hears rumors that all sides were, had ethical issues. However, there was one side that apparently had massive military might, and another side that some argue used the media as a weapon of sorts, played the ‘victim’ card, and ultimately, I mean I didn’t study it myself in any depth at all, I just heard these rumors, but the concepts I heard were that the side that used the media and played the ‘victim’ card won out, won the war, against the militarily dominant side that won the battles.

Back to the Navi, and Avatar. I felt really skeptical, whilst watching, that a military solution would work out.

I feel that in reality the situation would be more like ‘Zulu’: they can band together as much as they want, but bows and arrows are no match for fire-arms, and thousands of them are no match for a few tens of men with small-arms.

I think the situation would end more like, well, Zulu, and so on I guess…

I guess where there is a situation like Avatar, there are three main possibilities, off the top of my head:
- assimilation
- annihilation
- trade

In the case where a group chooses neither trade nor is open to assimilation, I feel their life is going to be short-lived. It is in some ways analogous to a loner-strategy for an individual within society as a whole.

Assimilation: I feel certain conquering cultures are pretty good at this, and grow larger and stronger as a result. Certain countries when they dominate another militarily may treat the conquered as slaves, and certain might provide more opportunities for assimilation. It is a hazy line. A key point I feel is genetic mixing: some societies, organized along ostensibly racial lines, might have a very loose definition of belonging to their central race, with the most tenuous blood connection being accepted. Others might choose a harder, stricter line on this.

I feel that countries that make it nearly impossible for conquered peoples to become ultimately assimilated within them will later re-fragment. Europe, I’m looking at you to some extent. French war against England. English war against France. Wars upon wars. Neither side ever managed, nor perhaps wished, to treat the other side as their own, and they are separate countries.

Annihilation. I guess off the top of my head, I’m thinking native Americans in the united states. The remnants had little choice but to assimilate, though I get the impression that they did this more through having no choice than through being open to it. I guess I’m trying to keep it objective, but a certain amount of bias showed through in the last couple of sentences, which is possibly explained by the final option: trade.

Two countries which trade together will tend to protect each other to some extent. They develop a symbiotic relationship. They may be happy with the trade situation, and anything that threatens that is likely to cause at least short-term problems for both.

The Navi have something that the sky-people wanted. In theory they could be rich beyond their wildest dreams. But they refused to adapt, to accept that things were going to change, whether they liked it or not, and it was really a case of adapt or basically die.

The Navi didn’t want anything from the sky people, but the point of trade might not be always to get something you want, so much as to set the basis for an amicable, somewhat civilized, relationship, with neither side resorting to guns and so on.

Sure, within a few years, the Navi would likely be destroyed by excessive tourism :-P but let’s leave that aside temporarily. At the very least, if the Navi provide the unobtainium to the sky people themselves and obtain sky people currency in return, there will be no war, and no reason for their tree to be destroyed.

That said, I was intending this to be the conclusion to my post, but clearly it isn’t… because this naturally leads to discussions of corruption :-/ Nigeria for example was, I heard, a pretty civilized country to start with, and then, from brief rumors I have heard, the presence of oil in the country meant that those who owned the land profited, became rich, along with their friends, and that pretty much set the scene for corruption.

Let’s back-pedal a little…. since the 18th century or so, it has I feel been possible to make significant amounts of money simply by providing brain power to society, by being creative, by being ‘intelligent’. This wasn’t I think so possible much prior to the 18th century. Everyone was broadly a unit, ‘one person’, everyone had basically the same economic value to society, whether they were farmers or soldiers, whether they were whipped into obedience, or encouraged with carrots.

Then in the 18th century or so, intellectual resources became valued, and it became … noticed? … obvious? … that it is more effective to motivate intellectual resources with carrots rather than sticks, and so, cutting a long story short, democracy was I feel born, not necessarily created by the poor as protection against the rich, but perhaps by the rich as a way to motivate the poor to create.

Which is fine. Whatever the motives, it seems to me to be a bit of a win-win for all.

Still, the foundings of democracy are I feel that each individual can contribute intellectual resources to society, that those resources are useful to society, and thus that in return society does good things for each person, in order to obtain those intellectual resources.

Now, going back to a country that is rich in some mineral resource. That country sells that resource to another country. Intellectual resources are not what is being traded here, but some material resource that already exists. The money goes to those that own the land where the resource is. Whether the owner is dumb, academically intelligent, funny, boring, or whatever, if they have the land, they have the economic resources. And their friends. And they can use those economic resources to purchase protection to maintain their position. And their children’s position, and their children may be less intelligent and funny than the original owners were. I mean, the original owners probably had to do *something* to get into that position. But once a family owns that land, there is no longer any requirement by them particularly to do anything creative to maintain it.

And so: corruption: their friends and they become rich, and everyone else has no value to them, and will likely fall into poverty. Except those who contrive to become friends with those in power.

Going back to the Navi… if they sell the unobtainium it would seem likely unfortunately that the same thing would happen. Their society would become an unequal corrupted one, with a few very rich people who control the entire forest and tree.

That is unfortunate but I wasn’t really intending to discuss that in this post. My real point of this post was intended to be that if the Navi wishes to avoid being assimilated or annihilated their best choice of action is something like:
- adapt: realize the future does change, the world does change, and refusing to recognize this is essentially a route to dodo-like annihilation
- trade with their wannabe-conquerors

If the sky-people can get the unobtainium through trade, they have less reason to go to war.

Now, obviously there are years of history trying all these possible strategies, and I am not a historian, just a computer scientist, so I guess I’m being horribly naive here, but it still interests me.

Next up: I think the South Americans tried trade with the Spanish to provide the Spanish with gold? but I’m not sure, a little hazy on this… I don’t think it ended terribly well though… but still wherever there is asymmetric military power, it’s not going to end well for someone most likely. Are there examples of where someone has something another person wants, and the other country is stronger, and yet they get on?

Saudi Arabia perhaps? United Emirates?

Still, corruption is the issue…

Ultimately, I feel that if the people of a society have ways of contributing significantly to the society using their intrinsic personal resources, then the society will be asymptotically relatively ‘fair’ whereas if the people of a society have little to intrinsically add to it, then it will tend to be asymptotically corrupt.

In the Navi’s society, at the time where we see it, its members gain respect through ability to hunt, ability to tame the wild beasts around them.

Sale of unobtainium would change the situation where those who dominate the land become wealthy and respected. There would be a tiny amount of money available to miners, in dirty dangerous conditions, and one or two people might be architects or engineers, designing the mines.

That said, all is not doom and gloom: the leaders have to spend their money on *something* otherwise what is the point, of having it? And therefore there is likely to be a set of industries existing ultimately to provide entertainment and privileges to those in power.

Film-making, story writing for example. Stories that make those in power feel good about themselves, happy, ethical.

Architecture for those in power to make cool palaces for themselves.

Genetic engineering to create the ultimate cool flying beast, controllable only by those in power, very powerful and formidable, none of this having to fight the thing: it’s automatically programmed to be loyal to those in power, and only to them.

Computer games I guess, but why not just hunt the poorer Navi? For that matter, just invite the sky people to join in, become friends with the sky people, and gain more power.

The Navi in power can send their children to university in the sky people’s country…

I think I’ll stop. This is becoming far too political :-P

Conclusions:

Ok, so to try to make some sort of conclusion, after re-reading:

- I feel military solutions to the Navi’s problems are doomed. The sky people will ultimately come back with bigger guns and weapons, just nuke the tree from orbit or whatever
- ultimately if the Navi cannot adjust to forge a place for themselves within the Sky People’s world, that is beneficial for both, ie trade, then the Navi are obsolete, and will be annihilated. Cold, but I feel: true
- trade for unobtainium will probably cause massive corruption and inequalities within the Navi, essentially destroying their current society
- however, in its place, there will ultimately be I feel a certain trickle-down effect as those who own the unobtainium, and have lots of money, try to figure out ways to spend that money

I feel the conquerors can make life smoother for the conquered in a few ways, this is not really a conclusion I know, but a few additional speculations :-P :
- provide education for free to members of the conquered / traded-with society
- be structured culturally in such a way that the Navi can ultimately assimilate, without too much discrimination on the basis of skin-color, height, and so on

Providing education for free to members of the conquered / traded-with society is important I feel because:
- it allows the non-leader members of that society to contribute usefully to their own society, building genetically engineered beasts for the leaders for example, rather than just dieing from cancer in the mines
- it provides significant opportunity for cultural mixing and assimilation, which is ultimately going to I feel increase the power, resources and reputation of the conquering society

Concrete proposition:
- in place of spending lots of money on sending food to poorer countries, we spend significant amounts of money providing professional training, or at least decent basic education, for free, to members of such countries
- a lottery can be created to allow certain members of the subservient society to obtain an education for free in the richer country.

There is a country that does this actually, sort of, and it is the United States. Prior to an arguable throttling of the borders in 2001, this country was arguably the most powerful country in the world. Coincidence?

Additional PS ;-) , after re-reading this, do you know who carried out this policy somewhat in Avatar? Yes, the Navi: they took Jake under their wing, educated him, allowed him to assimilate entirely into their society, and a direct result was that Jake became loyal to them, and protected them.

Music from twenty years ago…

January 22nd, 2010

Not really a post about writing as such, more a post about nostalgia.

Chinese potato seems to have lots of Western songs from my teenage years on it now. I’m not sure when they appeared, but I don’t think they were there a year or two ago.

I looked at Neneh Cherry’s Buffalo Stance. I seem to remember that I used to think she looked, how to say?, to me, somewhat … I don’t know, ghetto? Not in a good way. But I used to think she looked cute I think? But in the video now, I can’t see how I ever thought she ever looked cute! Strange… Still, to be fair, I still really like the song, and I find the words quite endearing: “No moneyman can win my love. It’s sweetness that I’m thinking of.”

I think at that time we didn’t really have videos as such, just the music on the radio – tape-to-tape machines were in! – and pictures and interviews in my sister’s Just Seventeen magazine. So maybe I never saw the video, just heard the song and the words on the radio?

Depeche Mode’s ‘World in My Eyes’. I still really like this, a lot.

Paula Abdul, ‘Straight Up’. I used to think she was really cute. I still think she’s quite cute actually, though I think the initial tap-dance makes her look like a guy… but after that I think she is quite cute. I find the bit where she says ‘straight up!’ and points upwards a bit silly…

Roxette ‘The Look’, I think I still like this. There was a group of fairly well-off, hard-working students at school that I hung out sometimes, I mean I wasn’t particularly well-off, relatively, so I don’t know how I fitted in particularly, perhaps I didn’t, but I seemed to hang out with them sometimes; and this was one of the main pop groups that this group liked; and I seem to still like it.

A-Ha ‘Take On Me’, this was from when I was like eight or something, maybe ten. I still really like it. Actually I say “still” but I’m not sure I actually liked it at the time. I don’t think I really enjoyed music at that time, I just liked the cartoon… I really like the music now though.

I find it strange watching the old videos because it makes me realize how old I am getting … and it reminds me of being young, which wasn’t always fun-fun-fun I think, but on the other hand, when I accept that it is a part of me, and then I look at my life now, it has I feel the opposite effect: making my life now feel quite free.

Ok, after re-reading, one more song I want to mention: INXS ‘I need you tonight’. I was never massively into this song, though I liked some of their later work like ‘Guns in the Sky’. There was a guy at school who was really good looking, I guess, since lots of really hot girls really liked him. He liked writing really long stories in English, and was pretty good at that. He really liked INXS. I think the singer in INXS is a bit too good-looking for me to relate to :-P

And… Guns’N Roses “Welcome to the Jungle”. I never really understood why this was so popular, and I still don’t really. It’s really strange to me seeing this come up with a huge copyright notice at the front. I can’t really imagine a rebellious group today having a really big copyright notice at the front and being popular, although perhaps I am being naive on this point? The whole video looks very contrived to me, put together by a huge record label is my feeling, but I could be biased. There was a guy at school whose parents were I feel really well-off, who was a really nice guy, lots of friends, had a really cute girlfriend I feel, and studied enough to be second in most classes, and he really liked this song, which I never understood at all, and still don’t! I can’t help thinking I need to get older still before I will understand this :-P

Prison Break season 3: teching the tech :-/

January 19th, 2010

I just started Prison Break season 3.

My first impressions, first episode, and first half of episode two were: this is awesome! Really cool interesting world. It’s like Lord of the Flies. I love the concept of getting order from chaos. It’s one of the reason why I used to play on the Everquest PvP servers, Rallos, not so I could pk – I didn’t really – but so that other people could pk me, and all the politics behind that.

And then, second half of second episode, Michael techs the tech. I was just like … oh man, what is this, the A-team?

The bit where he suddenly magically discovers a way to get water to flow out of a pipe into the yard, and everyone is happy. I just thought the whole thing was ludicrous, I don’t even know where to start, so:
- Michael holds the match the wrong way up, with the flame at the top, so it keeps going out. Heat rises, the ions rise, the flame rises. He’s an engineer, is he so surprised it keeps going out? It’s almost as if they made the actor playing Michael hold it like that so it went out each time… :-P
- the whole concept of having a block in the tunnel that can be conveniently cleared by an explosion, it’s I feel like something out of Zelda, which is admittedly I feel a very fun game, but games and films don’t set the same standard in terms of suspension of belief I feel.
- how did he suddenly find this pipe and the block? How did he even know the block was there? Magical. Teching the tech…
- explosion, from alcohol. Alcohol tends not to be explosive, unless it’s mixed with air, oxygen, and that’s quite challenging. A bag of alcohol is highly unlikely to explode I feel.
- and then, why doesn’t Michael just tell the dealer what he is doing? Why doesn’t he tell the guy who runs the prison what he is planning? There is no plot-legitimate reason except to create a fake suspense, A-team style, I feel.

Other than that, the whole concept of a lawless jail having rules and laws is pretty cool I feel, so I might keep watching anyway. I’m quite disappointed about the whole teching the tech thing though…

Prison Break: possible flaws in Michael’s character

January 19th, 2010

I just watched the end of Prison Break season 2, episode 20, and the start of episode 21.

I got bored with Dark Angel pretty fast. I think it may be fun for short episodes, but for watching lots of episodes en masse, I feel it gets tiring pretty quickly, since there is not really much of an ongoing plot underlying the episodes, besides her quest to find her classmates, which doesn’t seem that interesting as far as quests go! At least, on its own, without something more, some pressure to get to them on time, before something bad happens to all of them.

So, I’ve gone back to Prison Break. I feel the characters in Prison Break feel very real. I feel they are generally intelligent. I think the plot is reasonable and well thought through, and very interesting, and really unpredictable, at least if one doesn’t pause the video every 30 seconds or so to try to figure out what happens next :-P

That said, I find the end of episode 20 and the start of episode 21 a little annoying to me. I think Michael is acting a bit stupidly and a bit out of character.

This is the bit where he sees Sucre send a message on the europeangoldfinch.net messageboard, telling him that T-Bag is in Panama, near where Michael is.

I think a specific thing I find annoying with Michael’s going after T-Bag is that, unless he does something unexpected, which is admittedly quite likely, I’m not really sure what he intends to do with T-Bag? I don’t really see Michael killing T-Bag, it is very out of character I feel; I can’t remember Michael directly killing anyone so far.

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On another track, all these lives that Michael has indirectly destroyed by breaking Lincoln out of jail. He is not I feel wrong to feel bad about this, and, more to the point, for example, perhaps it could be more in character if, when he realizes he’s going to do something bad, he just stops. Or maybe, when I say more in character, I mean: more in a hero’s character.

For example: with Sarah, he explicitly asked her to leave the door open, effectively screwing up her life. Whilst I can understand this, considering the amount of pressure he was under at the time! but hey, he’s a hero right? , and also whilst the very act of asking her was itself courageous, the results for her were catastrophic, and she did it under I feel moral coercion.

I feel if there was some way for him to have got Sarah to do stuff without moral coercion, and similarly for the warden, without physical coercion, I feel I’d feel more comfortable with his character.

I’m not saying it’s easy to do, and I’m holding up Prison Break to a far higher standard than any other series, simply because I feel it really is one of the best, if not the best, but anyway it was what was crossing my mind recently whilst watching it, and arguably nothing is perfect.

To balance things out a bit, I really do think Prison Break is an awesome piece of writing generally. Really well done I feel.

Interesting potential writing exercise: figure out a way to rewrite some of the bits where Michael doesn’t do things that are particularly nice, and change it around a bit.

An example of where he does do something nice, against his own best direct interest, is where they go into the bar in the middle of the New Mexican desert, he gets attacked, Sucre walks in (so: help from someone he’s been nice to in the past), and then, specifically, after the gun fight, Michael lets his assailants go, so that they can take one guy to the hospital.

Another example of where he doesn’t is: T-Bag wants into the escape. There are two possibilities here: Michael forgives T-Bag for things he has done in the past and welcomes into the team, or Michael doesn’t want to have T-Bag running around outside, so he refuses to go any further in the escape, potentially compromising the escape. At this point, something else jumps in, and neutralizes T-Bag somehow.

Not: wait till Michael’s just about finished escaping, and then randomly regret T-Bag’s escaping and run back to kill him, or whatever he is going to do, I feel.

Idea for a writing exercise: rewrite Dark Angel episode 3

January 19th, 2010

Idea for a writing exercise: rewrite Dark Angel episode 3, ‘Flushed’, taking into account lessons learned from watching Prison Break, increasing the number of parallel sub-plots, and the amount of suspension, and problems for the hero.

One thing I liked about writing workshops is not so much that people make useful comments on one’s work – it happens but mostly I feel the comments say ‘I like’ or ‘I don’t like’, just in more words… but something I do like about writing workshops is that you can see people who are about your level, and you can see what seems like obvious ways to improve their writing, and then apply the same lessons to one’s own work.

When one looks at one’s own work, the lessons are not always quite as obvious as when one looks at other people’s.

Actually, when one looks at one’s own work that one left fallow for a year or two, things that other people said at the time become more obvious to oneself, but still, waiting a year after writing something to learn from it is quite a slow process I feel…

The plot in Dark Angel episode 3, and in Dark Angel so far in general I feel, is fairly linear, with only the tiniest smidgeon of parallel subplots, and contradictory actions.

The plot is essentially:
- Max (=Dark Angel) needs a drug, tryptophen, in order to supplement serotonin levels, which are insufficient in her brain without the drug
- her flatmates see her eratic behavior, and its association with the drug, and assume that the drug is a recreational drug, that she takes for pleasure, and that she has lost control over
- they do not understand that it is actually more like a drug that a Parkinson’s patient might take to compensate for reduced dopamine levels: that it is essential for her normal well-being and continued survival
- they flush the drug down the toilet!
- there is a slight pre-plot here:
- she had had to ‘borrow’ a chunk of money from them to obtain the tryptophen
- and she had used that money to buy the tryptophen
- then she stole a car in order to raise money to pay back her friends!
- when Max understands that there is no way for her to obtain the tryptophen legally, she breaks into a hospital pharmacy and obtains the drug
- an orderly notices the break-in and alerts security
- she is overpowered, by three police officers
- she is taken to jail

meantime, the guy she likes, Logan? , notices her missing and goes to see Max’s friends to find out where Max is
- he communicates the necessity of the drug
- he uses an inside connection in the police force to procure the belongings that Max had had when Max entered the jail, the evidence perhaps
- the inside connection breaks Max’s female friend, Cyndi, into the jail! into the same cell-block as where Max is

in parallel:
- Max meets a guy who seems quite cultured and helpful
- he obtains milk for her, through an inside connection in the guards, which apparently contains tryptophen
- he agrees to help her to escape, by providing a distraction, opera singing in the courtyard
- she attempts to escape, but fails to get over the fence
- she is recaptured, the warden sees her, and likes her, sexually, and has her transferred to his quarters, so that he can rape her, and keep raping her, though she isn’t actually raped just yet
- there is a girl in the quarters who is the current rape target
- Max wants to free the girl along with herself

Cyndi manages to break into the Warden’s office, by climbing through the window.
- she meets up with the girl and asks the girl where Max is
- next we see Max in a coma in her bed, and the warden appearing over her
- Max grabs the wardens throat and pushes him against the wall
- we learn that Max had already obtained the drug from Cyndi, and taken them. Cyndi ‘Girl! What do those pills have in them?’ Max: ‘Spinach!’
- the girls force the warden to help them escape, by taking them outside the jail in his car
- Max and the girl hide in the boot
- Cyndi sits in the front with a gun pointed at the warden
- it’s a little unclear to my mind how they get past the checkpoints without the warden saying something. Cyndi is fairly weak after all I feel, and would not suicide herself to protect Max or revenge the warden or anything like that by killing the warden if the warden alerted the guards
- the plot skips handily over such an issue and presents the girls outside the jail

At this point, the warden overpowers Cyndi, and heads for the boot of the car
- just as he reaches the boot of the car, the boot opens
- Max had broken the lock earlier!
- Max gets out and overpowers the warden
- a jeep full of guards drives up
- Max jumps on the jeep, and kicks the guards’ butts
- meanwhile the warden comes back to his senses, grabs the gun, and points it at Cyndi and the girl
- who are escaping into the woods at the side of the road
- and manage to get away unharmed
- Max gets into the jeep and drives it towards the warden, who is sheltering behind his car, firing the pistol at Max
- Max drives the jeep into the car, which knocks forward, running over the warden
- Max and Cyndi and the girl are free

Meantime, Liebecker, a military guy who is trying to kill the escaped barcoded guys, has received a call from a private detective, who he has obligated to snitch on Max
- Liebecker actually arrives at the jail just before Max and Cyndi and the girl break out of it
- when he finds out they’ve escaped, he orders the records searched
- the search reveals no records
- and we cut to Logan, who’s just finished deleting them

Actually, *pant* *puff* ! , there is a fair amount of detail in the plot, and a smidgeon of subplot: Liebecker chasing her in parallel.

Still, Liebecker is easily thwarted it seems: Max and Cyndi and the girl merely escape jail, and Logan erases Max’s traces.

To be honest, for a 40 minute episode, there is a fair amount of detail here I feel. Maybe this is about as complicated as a single episode story can get?

I’ll have a ponder over this and see what I can come up with.

Possibly I need a way of measuring just how much plot one can fit in a 40 minute screenplay? Possibly I should rewrite the original episode, in my own words, using the original plot, I mean using the words I can remember, and improvising where I forget; and then I can do the same with a potential new episode screenplay, and compare?

Idea for a story: fighting the rising seas in Calcutta

January 19th, 2010

I think it could be possible to make an interesting Prison-Break style story from the fight against rising seas in a specific city, for example Calcutta.

By making the story span many years – forty or fifty – we can possibly speed up the story enough to create plot, tension, suspense.

We can have a group or two or three fighting against the rising global warming, and the obstacles arrayed against them: political, scientific and so on, and how they overcome them at each stage, until slowly the waters start to recede, and people can move back into the, somewhat cleansed, city.

It sounds a like little sanjie haoren, a Chinese film about the rising waters in the 3 Gorges damn area, except that sanjie haoren doesn’t I feel really have much of a plot: there is not really suspense and then denouement. Sanjie haoren is more like a documentary showing the rising water level, and its effects on the human population.

Similarly the Day after Tomorrow depicts the possible effects of global warming, but I do not feel there is a plot. The participants do not seem to ever reverse the effects. It is not a ‘Next’-like film for example where the protagonist realizes what is going to happen and then avoids that.

And neither is my proposed story a Next-like film, just that, in the nature of films, stories and fantasies, the protagonists get sufficiently lucky to reverse the global warming trend, somewhat through their own efforts, and somewhat because they are perhaps courageous and sympathetic heros?

Cliff-hangers, or not?

January 16th, 2010

Dark Angel’s episodes are generally I feel self-contained. 24 Hours and Prison Break systematically have I feel a cliff-hanger at the end of every episode.

Speaking for myself:
- watching 24 Hours on tv, I find annoying, since I invariably miss every other episode or so, and the story skips loads of chunks and I feel I am missing out
- whereas Dark Angel et al are I feel very watchable on tv.

On the other hand, watching as a block, the whole season, I feel Prison Break et al draw me in much more. I tend to just try to watch the whole season in a weekend or so, whereas Dark Angel, after an episode or so, I’m ready to take a break, though that could possibly be a good thing, for my private life :-P

I suspect that tv companies push for cliff-hangers at the end of each episode though I feel personally that if I am writing things that will appeal more to me personally, I would push for no cliff-hanger at the end of each episode, if it is a screenplay for weekly tv viewing.

I was going to say that 24 Hours, Lost, Prison Break are more famous and well known, and perhaps it is because of the cliffhangars? And that could be true. Still there are I feel some series which don’t have cliff-hangers, and that are successful, eg Star Trek. I think at this point in time though that 24 Hours et al are far more successful currently!

Maybe a possible rise in home entertainment systems, and the use of dvd players and so on mean that many people will buy the whole season on dvd, and that the series with cliff-hangers are very popular in this format, and drive word of mouth marketing in this way?

Dark Angel, first few episodes

January 16th, 2010

Dark Angel is I feel ultimately hot. I love her face, and the calm way she approaches I feel many situations, she doesn’t seem to get flustered, even in the face of almost-certain death.

And, unlike to my mind Steven Segal, she doesn’t seem to me to be particularly arrogant, or horrible. She seems to me to be nice to her friends, and to people generally.

I feel she is a departure somewhat from my classic hero-model, because she is not I feel always perfectly ‘nice’ to others. Is this a good thing and why she is successful, or is this a weak-point of the series and why it only has a couple of seasons? Actually I don’t know how many season there are, but I don’t think it is as successful as Prison Break?

I feel Dark Angel’s actions are awesome, very hero-like. I feel her words are often quite caustic, which is fine, but a little off-putting to me at first. I think after a while I start to feel that her acid words are an attempt to cover up an underlying passion to help people and be nice to people.

The plot itself is I feel a league away from the detailed intricate web of suspense that I feel is Prison Break. Still there are moments when I’m not sure what will happen, although I can’t say I’m particularly in suspense.

I really enjoy watching Jessica Alba playing Dark Angel :-P

24 Hours Season 7, very briefly

January 16th, 2010

I started to watch 24 Hours, Season 7. I thought the first four or five seasons were awesome, and I needed a break from Prison Break, which I was starting to be able to predict with more accuracy than was interesting to me.

I didn’t get very far with 24 Hours, Season 7 though. I felt that on the one hand there was an awful lot of what I felt to be very transparent propaganda, and on the other hand I felt the plot seemed to repeat earlier plots. The whole ‘we captured the bad guy, but he turned out to be the good guy undercover’ thing.

So I stopped watching 24 Hours, and started watching Dark Angel instead.